English Language Paper 2 Q3 exemplar

You would need one more paragprah for 12 marks:

The writer uses language to influence us to think the woman as being scary. We see this when she is described as “hissing”. The word choice of “hissing” is associated with snakes and other dangerous animals, it has suggestions of an unnatural sound and one that causes alarm and panic. Furthermore the use of onomatopoeia heightens the writers attempts to influence us to believe the woman to be scary as we are able to hear the unnatural sound that is snake like and used when animals are warning of attack.

The writer also uses language to influence us to think of the woman as ultimately weak. This is shown through the use of contrast as she begins by having “stormed” into the room but by the end she has “limped” out of the room. The word choice of stormed has suggestions of aggression, power and affecting those around, whereas in contrast the word choice of “limped” has suggestions of being injured, weak and vulnerable. This contrast shows her depletion in strength in her encounter with her boss, showing she is only brave alone and not faced with hierarchy.