Firstly Martin no longer is in the employment of the prison service. He has been “dismissed”. He lost his job for his act of kindness which was against the rules, whereas the prison guards at Medway have not been fired, they are simply “suspended” after their terrible acts against child prisoners. This shows that Martin is not protected by his employers (and shows Martin in a better light than his employers as his act was an act of kindness), whereas the Medway prison guards are better protected by their employers and do not face immediate harsh consequences for their disturbing behaviour.

Martin is shown to have empathy and caring towards his charges, as he gave “biscuits to a little hungry child”. Whereas the G4S officers do not have empathy and are cruel to their charges as they used “unnecessary force” and “foul language”. This shows a big difference in how Martin sees and treats the child prisoners compared with the G4S guards.Martin is shown to be human and caring, whereas the G4S officers are shown in a negative light – they are bullies.

Martin acted alone as he solely gave the child a biscuit, whereas the G4S officers – there were “seven”. Martin is brave and not afraid to go against what is the norm whereas the G4S officers act as a pack and perhaps lead each other on, they are not portrayed positively and we see them as a gang.

English Language Paper 2 Q3 exemplar

You would need one more paragprah for 12 marks:

The writer uses language to influence us to think the woman as being scary. We see this when she is described as “hissing”. The word choice of “hissing” is associated with snakes and other dangerous animals, it has suggestions of an unnatural sound and one that causes alarm and panic. Furthermore the use of onomatopoeia heightens the writers attempts to influence us to believe the woman to be scary as we are able to hear the unnatural sound that is snake like and used when animals are warning of attack.

The writer also uses language to influence us to think of the woman as ultimately weak. This is shown through the use of contrast as she begins by having “stormed” into the room but by the end she has “limped” out of the room. The word choice of stormed has suggestions of aggression, power and affecting those around, whereas in contrast the word choice of “limped” has suggestions of being injured, weak and vulnerable. This contrast shows her depletion in strength in her encounter with her boss, showing she is only brave alone and not faced with hierarchy.

Paper 2 Q2 7/8 Exemplar

Eddie was a child who attend(ed)s school in 2013 where as Henry was a child who attended school in 1822. This is where their differences stem from.

Eddie goes home and becomes ‘too busy killing things, while talking on Skype to his friend’; making recreational use of modern day technology. Obviously in 1822, young Henry could not have done this and instead goes ‘to church’ and writes ‘letters’ in order communicate instead of skype.

Henry’s relationship with his father is also very different to the one Eddie has. For example, he writes the letter in a very formal way, signing it off as ‘your respectful son’ and addresses his father as ‘my dear father’. This is different to how Eddie treats his dad, as Eddie jokily remarks "you can’t think of one can you?" as to ‘take the micky out of’ his father. This shows how Eddie has less respect for his father than Henry does; this is also shown when Eddie ‘doesn’t look up from his computer' when his dad enters.

Eddie also appears to enjoy school which is connoted when he ‘announced’ what he was doing in english at the dinner table. Henry on the other hand clearly does not enjoy school as he has the ‘worst’ meals and would ‘work all my life time than remain here’